Monday, October 02, 2006

In the example below, the writer has lost track of the subject of the first sentence. The pronoun "it" can only refer to the fact, and this makes the second sentence say that the fact is of benefit, which is nonsense; the writer means that the model is a benefit.

The fact this model is jurisdiction-led is both a benefit and challenge to
the system . It is
of benefit because the provider registry systems can be adopted in a staged and
customized approach.

The fact this model is jurisdiction-led is both a benefit and challenge
to the
system.
The model is of benefit because the provider registry systems can be adopted in
a staged and customized approach.


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