Monday, March 17, 2008

Missing verb

At the Provinces option, additional test data for use by the Service Provider to test the Staging Build pursuant to the Staging Build Test Plan, provided that the test data is delivered to the Service Provider not less that ten (10) Business Days before the commencement of testing.

Missing verb - "will be provided" or something is required in there.

Example of opening paragraph that needs help

This documents is one of a set of several documents which detail the
Test Strategy and plans for the Province's xxxxxx system and the first repository of clinical
Information to be connected to the xxxxxxx System which is for laboratory services
with the Provincial Laboratory Information System (the PLIS System) .
Test Data for the two systems have been expressed in a series of
‘test stages’ each of which provide a detail plan within or between these two
systems or are an interface to a further system which provides services or data to
the iEHR and PLIS Systems.